I would like your opinion on my Warrior Cats story

you need to add more but did you know that I'm making one called midnight sparks prophecy?

not bad but i would like to see the rest.hopefully it gets more exciting. plus, check your spelling

Sorry about my comment but your Spelling is terrible and you could have done much much better.And your story does not relate to the Warriors

Think about writting something that isn't that stupid, because you'll never be an author.

I personally think this isn't AWESOME. If that's your part one, WOW. Plus, his name isn't Rusty anymore, it's Firestar. And not to be offencive, but your grammar and spelling makes you sound like a 5 year old. I spent numerous ammounts of time writting and I wish I could be an author, but sadly I have to say I don't think you will ever be one. But, I think it was nice that you tried to write. Not a lot of people do, neither do they like reading. If this is all you read, you should read more of the series. I personally think that the first book is no where near the best in the series, and that all written stories should be near the future, or the complete past, so keep writting, even though I didn't enjoy this.

I think you need to fix your spelling and try to come up with your ideas. Make your own names. It also seems like your copying from the Into the wild book. I also think you should have wrote a little more. I wish I could have given more than 3 stars.

Ok i dont want to rain on your parade but this story seems like a copy of one the first chapters of Into the Wild.Second you really need to fix spelling and grammar and use descriptive words.Next dont use the cats names all the time try using something diferent,other than that i think the story is good

Good Luck and best wishes

This story could definitely use a LOT of polishing. First, there's so many grammatical mistakes in this, that I couldn't even begin listing them! Second, you need to be descriptive, and not use their names all the time. Finally, even in the first glance I knew that it'll be horrible, and it was even worst than I'd expected. I just hope that the next story can at least improve a little, well, better than this horrible piece of writing.

Good job. If you want go to dragonarereal.weebly.com then go to the blog page and read my story so far

Hi McKenna. Please don't be upset by what I have said. You asked for opinions and you got an answer and the answer is trying to help.

Take from these things what you can, improve and move on. That is the way to progress. But to reject polite attempts to help, when requested, because you feel criticised is not wise.

I've been writing stories since I was 10. I was even submitting them to magazines at that age. And crying with every rejection letter.I've recently been publishing my stories online. You have a long way to go but that's not a bad thing. My writing is still improving. The more I write the better I get.

I would suggest something for you to check out. You don't say how old you are and that doesn't matter. I can tell you love to write. Set yourself up a site at shutterfly.com. Its free and you can add pictures and text. Take a look at mine at www.furbytheferalfeline.shutterfly.com. on the Inspirational page. There is a journal feature. Also go online and download a free trial of The Journal 5. It has a locked password feature so you can also use it as a diary. It's free for 45 days. I write my stories on the Journal 5 and then transfer to whatever site I want it published on.
You can publish your work and later go back in and redo it. Plus the shutterfly lets you add the email addresses of all your friends so they can read it.

Good luck!